Another pass on the HBM report.

diff --git a/sandbox/2011-07-10_booth_hbm2011.rst b/sandbox/2011-07-10_booth_hbm2011.rst
index dab453aadeb3be77d3dd7a5c555a6cdd259020ee..e49d56ef9f3738c0ca39dfe5af5a1c4ad75a8c02 100644 (file)
--- a/sandbox/2011-07-10_booth_hbm2011.rst
+++ b/sandbox/2011-07-10_booth_hbm2011.rst
@@ -7,21 +7,21 @@ NeuroDebian@HBM2011.ca
 ======================
 
 On June 26-30 the annual meeting of the Organization for Human Brain Mapping
-(HBM2011_) took place in Quebec City, Canada.
-Encouraged by our :ref:`positive experience at last year's SfN in San Diego
-<chap_debian_booth_sfn2010>` and enthusiasm of our scientific adviser,
-`James V. Haxby`_, we hosted the NeuroDebian booth. The setup was pretty much the same as last year:
-Some chairs and tables (but no carpet), lots of people, our `tri-fold flyers`_, a Debian mirror
-and some virtual machine images to show Debian in action. This time we also had
-an LCD display attracting visitors with the :ref:`package swarm <chap_neurodebian_package_swarm>`, some demos,
-and the title page of our `recent paper`_.  We had many curious
-people having their first exposure to Debian, long-time users expressing
-their gratitude to Debian, and our upstream developers gathering together
-to discuss technical and real-life issues.  Because this time we registered booth as
-NeuroDebian, we had additional pleasure to enlighten visitors on the nature of NeuroDebian
-as a project within Debian instead of being a derived distribution. But that
-is nothing new really, so let's talk about the
-differences from last year's booth.
+(HBM2011_) took place in Quebec City, Canada.  Encouraged by our :ref:`positive
+experience at last year's SfN in San Diego <chap_debian_booth_sfn2010>` and
+enthusiasm of our scientific adviser, `James V. Haxby`_, we hosted another
+NeuroDebian booth. The setup was pretty much the same as last year: Some chairs
+and tables, lots of people, our `tri-fold flyers`_, a Debian mirror and some
+virtual machine images to show Debian in action. This time we also had an LCD
+display attracting visitors with the :ref:`package swarm
+<chap_neurodebian_package_swarm>`, some demos, and our `recent paper`_.  We had
+many curious people have their first exposure to Debian, long-time users
+expressing their gratitude to Debian, and our upstream developers getting
+together to discuss various topics.  Having registered the booth as
+"NeuroDebian", we had the additional pleasure of explaining visitors the
+concept of a project *inside* Debian, in contrast to a derived distribution.
+But that is nothing new really, so let's talk about the differences from last
+year's booth.
 
 First of all, we had more people at the booth. Dominique Belhachemi volunteered
 to help us out -- and that was very much appreciated. Although HBM has only
@@ -54,11 +54,11 @@ that offers free software solutions that an increasing amount of their
 customers demands (e.g. PsychoPy_). Apparently, the movement towards open
 research software has finally made it into the business plans of companies, as
 they seem to start perceiving compatibility with free software systems as a
-competitive advantage.  We explained how software gets into Debian, how its
-release cycle is managed.  To foster their motivation we also pointed them
-to the existing open-source products other companies (often competitors)
-have already made available or even present in Debian.  Let's see whether we see more "Debian-certified"
-research products in the future.
+competitive advantage.  We explained how software gets into Debian, and how its
+release cycle is managed.  To foster their motivation we also pointed them to
+the existing open-source software that is already available or even present in
+Debian.  Let's see whether we see more "Debian-certified" research products in
+the future.
 
 .. _PsychoPy: http://packages.debian.org/psychopy
 
@@ -87,7 +87,7 @@ this discussion during a workshop in September. A report will follow...
 .. _James V. Haxby: http://haxbylab.dartmouth.edu/ppl/jim.html
 
 Acknowledgments
-----------------
+---------------
 
 This booth has been made possible by the generous support of Prof. 
 `James V. Haxby`_ (Dartmouth College, New Hampshire, USA).