From 9a95aa0deb1c6d2ba442d7020d651f162f5c10aa Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Michael Hanke <michael.hanke@gmail.com>
Date: Wed, 10 Nov 2010 10:31:04 -0500
Subject: [PATCH] Andy's review.

---
 .../brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex  | 42 +++++++++----------
 1 file changed, 21 insertions(+), 21 deletions(-)

diff --git a/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex b/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex
index f6627f5..9eb4dda 100644
--- a/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex
+++ b/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex
@@ -387,7 +387,7 @@ system allows Debian to respond to problems quickly and honestly.
 
 \ndsection{NeuroDebian is}
 
-a Debian project aiming to provide the Neuroscience community with a
+a Debian project that provides the Neuroscience community with a
 stable and versatile research platform -- the Debian OS.
 Since 2005, NeuroDebian integrates neuroscience software into the Debian
 operating system to allow neuroscientists to benefit from the advantages of
@@ -398,7 +398,7 @@ all Debian suites (and various releases of Ubuntu).
 The combination of a stable generic
 operating system, Debian, and a variety of conveniently accessible research
 software creates a versatile research platform for neuroscience that offers the
-latest methodologies of the field for everyone, for free.
+latest methodologies of the field to everyone, for free.
 These advantages make NeuroDebian increasingly popular among
 neuroscientists and scientific software developers.
 
@@ -414,6 +414,17 @@ efforts of thousands of Debian contributors.
 \vspace{3em}
 \columnbreak
 
+\ndsubsection{NeuroDebian software coverage}
+\begin{flushright}
+\vspace{-0.5em}
+\url{http://neuro.debian.net/pkgs.html}
+\end{flushright}
+\textit{Electrophysiology:} BioSig, Sigviewer, Brian, \ldots\\
+\textit{Machine Learning:} PyMVPA, scikits.learn, \ldots\\
+\textit{Imaging:} AFNI, FSL, Mricron, NiPy, Voxbo, \ldots\\
+\textit{Psychophysics:} PsychoPy, PyEPL, PyOptical, \ldots\\
+\vspace{-0.5em}
+
 \ndsubsection{Benefits from Debian integration}
 
 \begin{itemize}[nolistsep,leftmargin=1pc]
@@ -421,31 +432,31 @@ efforts of thousands of Debian contributors.
 % rephrase to outline the benefit, not burden
 \item Debian standards and policies guarantee quality and robustness
 
-\item Debian centralized bug tracking system provides a unified
+\item Debian's centralized bug tracking system provides a unified
   single-point of entry for bug reporting and troubleshooting for any
   software in Debian
 
 \item Debian makes software available through a world-wide distribution
   network, thus offloading bandwidth demands
 
-\item Other Debian enthusiasts take care about large-scale aspects of
+\item Other Debian contributors handle large-scale aspects of
   deployment, quality assurance, porting and integration at the level
   of the entire distribution:
 
 \begin{description}[nolistsep,leftmargin=1pc]
 \item[Porting] Software sources get built for 11 hardware
   architectures and 3 kernels (Linux, HURD, kFreeBSD). Porter teams
-  maintain build infrastructure and help making the code
+  maintain build infrastructure and help make the code
   platform-agnostic.
 \item[QA] Whole-archive rebuilds assure robustness of packaging and
   warn about upcoming problems (core libraries upgrades) beforehand.
-\item[Internationalization (I18n)] Translator teams help localizing
-  software for more than 60 languages
+\item[Internationalization (I18n)] Translator teams help localize
+  software for more than 60 languages.
 \end{description}
 
-\item Neuroscience software becomes 1st-class citizen within Debian
+\item Neuroscience software becomes a 1st-class citizen within the Debian
   project, which guarantees its availability, longevity, smooth
-  installation and upgrades
+  installation and upgrades.
 
 %\item Participation in the Debian community helps to assure Debian's
 %  aptness for the neuroscientific software demands
@@ -462,7 +473,7 @@ efforts of thousands of Debian contributors.
 \textit{Others:} NeuroDebian Virtual Machine
 
 % Here place a left-top corner of OSX with seamless mode
-\vspace{1mm}
+\vspace{3mm}
 \includegraphics[width=\columnwidth]{../shots/mac_vm_mricron}
 
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@@ -478,17 +489,6 @@ efforts of thousands of Debian contributors.
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-\ndsubsection{NeuroDebian software coverage}
-\begin{flushright}
-\vspace{-0.5em}
-\url{http://neuro.debian.net/pkgs.html}
-\end{flushright}
-\textit{Electrophysiology:} BioSig, Sigviewer, Brian, \ldots\\
-\textit{Machine Learning:} PyMVPA, scikits.learn, \ldots\\
-\textit{Imaging:} AFNI, FSL, Mricron, NiPy, Voxbo, \ldots\\
-\textit{Psychophysics:} PsychoPy, PyEPL, PyOptical, \ldots\\
-
-
 
 \def\blank{\hspace{0em}\vspace{-1em}}
 \columnbreak
-- 
2.39.2