681634 wording improvement from private email

diff --git a/681834_gnome_recommends_networkmanager/rra-draft-ijackson b/681834_gnome_recommends_networkmanager/rra-draft-ijackson
index b284c8c771873e28090bd12a13d4a9804eaf6abd..36e77d33c3f909cf9baf5712c0838c8587c21dca 100644 (file)
--- a/681834_gnome_recommends_networkmanager/rra-draft-ijackson
+++ b/681834_gnome_recommends_networkmanager/rra-draft-ijackson
@@ -20,14 +20,15 @@
     deeper or tighter integration of network-manager into GNOME than
     was the case in squeeze.
 
- 4. If matters are left as they currently stand, users who have the gnome
-    metapackages installed but do not have network-manager installed will,
-    in the process of upgrading from squeeze to wheezy (either due to an
-    explicit decision to remove it or an implicit decision to not install
-    it by disabling automatic installation of Recommends), end up
-    installing network-manager on systems where it is currently not
-    installed.  It will also no longer be possible for users to install
-    GNOME metapackages in wheezy without installing network-manager.
+ 4. If matters are left as they currently stand, users who have the
+    gnome metapackages installed but do not have network-manager
+    installed (either due to an explicit decision to remove it or an
+    implicit decision to not install it by disabling automatic
+    installation of Recommends) will, in the process of upgrading from
+    squeeze to wheezy, end up installing network-manager on systems
+    where it is currently not installed.  It will also no longer be
+    possible for users to install GNOME metapackages in wheezy without
+    installing network-manager.
 
  5. For most applications and components, the only drawback of this would
     be some additional disk space usage, since the application, despite