Andy's review.

diff --git a/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex b/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex
index f6627f50a3ae80472cf91b0077763f68e4af4fd4..9eb4ddabbbac0f065013db28bb7855e4438c1e40 100644 (file)
--- a/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex
+++ b/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex
@@ -387,7 +387,7 @@ system allows Debian to respond to problems quickly and honestly.
 
 \ndsection{NeuroDebian is}
 
 
 \ndsection{NeuroDebian is}
 

-a Debian project aiming to provide the Neuroscience community with a
+a Debian project that provides the Neuroscience community with a

 stable and versatile research platform -- the Debian OS.
 Since 2005, NeuroDebian integrates neuroscience software into the Debian
 operating system to allow neuroscientists to benefit from the advantages of
 stable and versatile research platform -- the Debian OS.
 Since 2005, NeuroDebian integrates neuroscience software into the Debian
 operating system to allow neuroscientists to benefit from the advantages of


@@ -398,7 +398,7 @@ all Debian suites (and various releases of Ubuntu).
 The combination of a stable generic
 operating system, Debian, and a variety of conveniently accessible research
 software creates a versatile research platform for neuroscience that offers the
 The combination of a stable generic
 operating system, Debian, and a variety of conveniently accessible research
 software creates a versatile research platform for neuroscience that offers the

-latest methodologies of the field for everyone, for free.
+latest methodologies of the field to everyone, for free.

 These advantages make NeuroDebian increasingly popular among
 neuroscientists and scientific software developers.
 
 These advantages make NeuroDebian increasingly popular among
 neuroscientists and scientific software developers.
 


@@ -414,6 +414,17 @@ efforts of thousands of Debian contributors.
 \vspace{3em}
 \columnbreak
 
 \vspace{3em}
 \columnbreak
 

+\ndsubsection{NeuroDebian software coverage}
+\begin{flushright}
+\vspace{-0.5em}
+\url{http://neuro.debian.net/pkgs.html}
+\end{flushright}
+\textit{Electrophysiology:} BioSig, Sigviewer, Brian, \ldots\\
+\textit{Machine Learning:} PyMVPA, scikits.learn, \ldots\\
+\textit{Imaging:} AFNI, FSL, Mricron, NiPy, Voxbo, \ldots\\
+\textit{Psychophysics:} PsychoPy, PyEPL, PyOptical, \ldots\\
+\vspace{-0.5em}
+

 \ndsubsection{Benefits from Debian integration}
 
 \begin{itemize}[nolistsep,leftmargin=1pc]
 \ndsubsection{Benefits from Debian integration}
 
 \begin{itemize}[nolistsep,leftmargin=1pc]


@@ -421,31 +432,31 @@ efforts of thousands of Debian contributors.
 % rephrase to outline the benefit, not burden
 \item Debian standards and policies guarantee quality and robustness
 
 % rephrase to outline the benefit, not burden
 \item Debian standards and policies guarantee quality and robustness
 

-\item Debian centralized bug tracking system provides a unified
+\item Debian's centralized bug tracking system provides a unified

   single-point of entry for bug reporting and troubleshooting for any
   software in Debian
 
 \item Debian makes software available through a world-wide distribution
   network, thus offloading bandwidth demands
 
   single-point of entry for bug reporting and troubleshooting for any
   software in Debian
 
 \item Debian makes software available through a world-wide distribution
   network, thus offloading bandwidth demands
 

-\item Other Debian enthusiasts take care about large-scale aspects of
+\item Other Debian contributors handle large-scale aspects of

   deployment, quality assurance, porting and integration at the level
   of the entire distribution:
 
 \begin{description}[nolistsep,leftmargin=1pc]
 \item[Porting] Software sources get built for 11 hardware
   architectures and 3 kernels (Linux, HURD, kFreeBSD). Porter teams
   deployment, quality assurance, porting and integration at the level
   of the entire distribution:
 
 \begin{description}[nolistsep,leftmargin=1pc]
 \item[Porting] Software sources get built for 11 hardware
   architectures and 3 kernels (Linux, HURD, kFreeBSD). Porter teams

-  maintain build infrastructure and help making the code
+  maintain build infrastructure and help make the code

   platform-agnostic.
 \item[QA] Whole-archive rebuilds assure robustness of packaging and
   warn about upcoming problems (core libraries upgrades) beforehand.
   platform-agnostic.
 \item[QA] Whole-archive rebuilds assure robustness of packaging and
   warn about upcoming problems (core libraries upgrades) beforehand.

-\item[Internationalization (I18n)] Translator teams help localizing
-  software for more than 60 languages
+\item[Internationalization (I18n)] Translator teams help localize
+  software for more than 60 languages.

 \end{description}
 
 \end{description}
 

-\item Neuroscience software becomes 1st-class citizen within Debian
+\item Neuroscience software becomes a 1st-class citizen within the Debian

   project, which guarantees its availability, longevity, smooth
   project, which guarantees its availability, longevity, smooth

-  installation and upgrades
+  installation and upgrades.

 
 %\item Participation in the Debian community helps to assure Debian's
 %  aptness for the neuroscientific software demands
 
 %\item Participation in the Debian community helps to assure Debian's
 %  aptness for the neuroscientific software demands


@@ -462,7 +473,7 @@ efforts of thousands of Debian contributors.
 \textit{Others:} NeuroDebian Virtual Machine
 
 % Here place a left-top corner of OSX with seamless mode
 \textit{Others:} NeuroDebian Virtual Machine
 
 % Here place a left-top corner of OSX with seamless mode

-\vspace{1mm}
+\vspace{3mm}

 \includegraphics[width=\columnwidth]{../shots/mac_vm_mricron}
 
 \begin{comment}
 \includegraphics[width=\columnwidth]{../shots/mac_vm_mricron}
 
 \begin{comment}


@@ -478,17 +489,6 @@ efforts of thousands of Debian contributors.
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-\ndsubsection{NeuroDebian software coverage}
-\begin{flushright}
-\vspace{-0.5em}
-\url{http://neuro.debian.net/pkgs.html}
-\end{flushright}
-\textit{Electrophysiology:} BioSig, Sigviewer, Brian, \ldots\\
-\textit{Machine Learning:} PyMVPA, scikits.learn, \ldots\\
-\textit{Imaging:} AFNI, FSL, Mricron, NiPy, Voxbo, \ldots\\
-\textit{Psychophysics:} PsychoPy, PyEPL, PyOptical, \ldots\\
-
-

 
 \def\blank{\hspace{0em}\vspace{-1em}}
 \columnbreak
 
 \def\blank{\hspace{0em}\vspace{-1em}}
 \columnbreak