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diff --git a/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex b/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex
index 9eb4ddabbbac0f065013db28bb7855e4438c1e40..221a44a3947e471c8c7d51d23a1d829138308bc2 100644 (file)
--- a/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex
+++ b/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex
@@ -88,10 +88,10 @@
 was founded by Ian Murdock in August 1993 with the goal
 to create an easy-to-install and maintain non-commercial GNU/Linux
 operating system that would be able to compete in the
 was founded by Ian Murdock in August 1993 with the goal
 to create an easy-to-install and maintain non-commercial GNU/Linux
 operating system that would be able to compete in the

-commercial market.  Since then Debian established itself as an
+commercial market.  Since then, Debian established itself as an

 independent and unique project driven by more than 3000
 enthusiastic contributors all around the globe.
 independent and unique project driven by more than 3000
 enthusiastic contributors all around the globe.

-Principles of \emph{do-ocracy} and democracy backed up by evolving transparent
+Principles of \mbox{\emph{do-ocracy}} and democracy backed up by evolving transparent

 standards allowed Debian to deliver the most comprehensive operating system -- not
 only by amount of integrated software, but also by
 number of the supported hardware architectures.
 standards allowed Debian to deliver the most comprehensive operating system -- not
 only by amount of integrated software, but also by
 number of the supported hardware architectures.


@@ -144,7 +144,7 @@ Very (Special|Stable) Operating Platform
   requiring the most recent versions of software.
 
 %\item[Testing] \emph{Constantly changing future release candidate}\\
   requiring the most recent versions of software.
 
 %\item[Testing] \emph{Constantly changing future release candidate}\\

-\item[``Almost-ready-to-release'']\hfill\emph{Testing} (now \emph{squeeze})\\
+\item[``Always-ready-to-release'']\hfill\emph{Testing} (now \emph{squeeze})\\

 %  What to become a next \emph{Stable} release candidate.\\
   Software versions known to be secure and of good quality.
 %  Software migrated from \emph{Unstable} which is known to be of good
 %  What to become a next \emph{Stable} release candidate.\\
   Software versions known to be secure and of good quality.
 %  Software migrated from \emph{Unstable} which is known to be of good


@@ -163,7 +163,7 @@ Very (Special|Stable) Operating Platform
   \emph{Testing} is assured to be robust. %, on average bi-yearly.
   Complementary updates keep the
   system secure. \\
   \emph{Testing} is assured to be robust. %, on average bi-yearly.
   Complementary updates keep the
   system secure. \\

-  \emph{Stable} is the choice where stability and security are of
+  \emph{Stable} is the best choice where stability and security are of

   primary importance.
 \end{description}
 
   primary importance.
 \end{description}
 


@@ -204,7 +204,7 @@ a new name -- \emph{wheezy}.
 \end{description}
 
 
 \end{description}
 
 

-\ndsubsection{Debian enthusiastic experts}
+\ndsubsection{Who is Debian}

 % could be simply 'Debian People' or 'Debian Community'
 
 Debian is the only major operating system developed
 % could be simply 'Debian People' or 'Debian Community'
 
 Debian is the only major operating system developed


@@ -388,9 +388,9 @@ system allows Debian to respond to problems quickly and honestly.
 \ndsection{NeuroDebian is}
 
 a Debian project that provides the Neuroscience community with a
 \ndsection{NeuroDebian is}
 
 a Debian project that provides the Neuroscience community with a

-stable and versatile research platform -- the Debian OS.
-Since 2005, NeuroDebian integrates neuroscience software into the Debian
-operating system to allow neuroscientists to benefit from the advantages of
+stable and versatile research platform -- the Debian operating system.
+Since 2005, \mbox{NeuroDebian} integrates neuroscience software into Debian
+to allow neuroscientists to benefit from the advantages of

 the universal operating system in their day-to-day research activities.
 The NeuroDebian repository
 (\url{http://neuro.debian.net}) offers the latest research software for
 the universal operating system in their day-to-day research activities.
 The NeuroDebian repository
 (\url{http://neuro.debian.net}) offers the latest research software for


@@ -414,7 +414,7 @@ efforts of thousands of Debian contributors.
 \vspace{3em}
 \columnbreak
 
 \vspace{3em}
 \columnbreak
 

-\ndsubsection{NeuroDebian software coverage}
+\ndsubsection{Software at your fingertips}

 \begin{flushright}
 \vspace{-0.5em}
 \url{http://neuro.debian.net/pkgs.html}
 \begin{flushright}
 \vspace{-0.5em}
 \url{http://neuro.debian.net/pkgs.html}


@@ -430,14 +430,14 @@ efforts of thousands of Debian contributors.
 \begin{itemize}[nolistsep,leftmargin=1pc]
 
 % rephrase to outline the benefit, not burden
 \begin{itemize}[nolistsep,leftmargin=1pc]
 
 % rephrase to outline the benefit, not burden

-\item Debian standards and policies guarantee quality and robustness
+\item Debian standards and policies guarantee quality and robustness.

 
 \item Debian's centralized bug tracking system provides a unified
   single-point of entry for bug reporting and troubleshooting for any
 
 \item Debian's centralized bug tracking system provides a unified
   single-point of entry for bug reporting and troubleshooting for any

-  software in Debian
+  software in Debian.

 
 \item Debian makes software available through a world-wide distribution
 
 \item Debian makes software available through a world-wide distribution

-  network, thus offloading bandwidth demands
+  network, thus offloading bandwidth demands.

 
 \item Other Debian contributors handle large-scale aspects of
   deployment, quality assurance, porting and integration at the level
 
 \item Other Debian contributors handle large-scale aspects of
   deployment, quality assurance, porting and integration at the level


@@ -507,7 +507,7 @@ buga dugabuga dugabuga dugabuga dugabuga dugabuga dugabuga dugabuga dugabuga dug
 \item[Available snapshotting service]
   % Entire NeuroDebian repository for any given past moment
   All versions of packages readily available
 \item[Available snapshotting service]
   % Entire NeuroDebian repository for any given past moment
   All versions of packages readily available

-\item[Data as the 1st class citizen]
+\item[Data as the 1st-class citizen]

   \url{http://neuro.debian.net/datasets.html}
 \item[Universal availability]
   % \begin{itemize}[nolistsep,leftmargin=1pc,topsep=0em]
   \url{http://neuro.debian.net/datasets.html}
 \item[Universal availability]
   % \begin{itemize}[nolistsep,leftmargin=1pc,topsep=0em]


@@ -539,8 +539,8 @@ Pennsylvania, Philadelphia, USA}
 
 \ndsubsection{Acknowledgements}
 
 
 \ndsubsection{Acknowledgements}
 

-NeuroDebian is grateful to all Debian developers and contributors for the
-development of Debian OS, and to Prof. James V. Haxby (PBS Department,
+NeuroDebian is grateful to all Debian developers and contributors for
+developing the Debian operating system, and to Prof. James V. Haxby (PBS Department,

 Dartmouth College) for his continued support and endless supply of
 Italian espresso (\url{http://neuro.debian.net/coffeeart.html}).
 
 Dartmouth College) for his continued support and endless supply of
 Italian espresso (\url{http://neuro.debian.net/coffeeart.html}).