From: Michael Hanke <michael.hanke@gmail.com>
Date: Wed, 10 Nov 2010 16:18:06 +0000 (-0500)
Subject: Printed version.
X-Git-Url: https://git.donarmstrong.com/?a=commitdiff_plain;h=219baa1150769d8bb0e598965858997348c0dda1;p=neurodebian.git

Printed version.
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diff --git a/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex b/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex
index 9eb4dda..221a44a 100644
--- a/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex
+++ b/artwork/brochure/brochure_debian-neurodebian.tex
@@ -88,10 +88,10 @@
 was founded by Ian Murdock in August 1993 with the goal
 to create an easy-to-install and maintain non-commercial GNU/Linux
 operating system that would be able to compete in the
-commercial market.  Since then Debian established itself as an
+commercial market.  Since then, Debian established itself as an
 independent and unique project driven by more than 3000
 enthusiastic contributors all around the globe.
-Principles of \emph{do-ocracy} and democracy backed up by evolving transparent
+Principles of \mbox{\emph{do-ocracy}} and democracy backed up by evolving transparent
 standards allowed Debian to deliver the most comprehensive operating system -- not
 only by amount of integrated software, but also by
 number of the supported hardware architectures.
@@ -144,7 +144,7 @@ Very (Special|Stable) Operating Platform
   requiring the most recent versions of software.
 
 %\item[Testing] \emph{Constantly changing future release candidate}\\
-\item[``Almost-ready-to-release'']\hfill\emph{Testing} (now \emph{squeeze})\\
+\item[``Always-ready-to-release'']\hfill\emph{Testing} (now \emph{squeeze})\\
 %  What to become a next \emph{Stable} release candidate.\\
   Software versions known to be secure and of good quality.
 %  Software migrated from \emph{Unstable} which is known to be of good
@@ -163,7 +163,7 @@ Very (Special|Stable) Operating Platform
   \emph{Testing} is assured to be robust. %, on average bi-yearly.
   Complementary updates keep the
   system secure. \\
-  \emph{Stable} is the choice where stability and security are of
+  \emph{Stable} is the best choice where stability and security are of
   primary importance.
 \end{description}
 
@@ -204,7 +204,7 @@ a new name -- \emph{wheezy}.
 \end{description}
 
 
-\ndsubsection{Debian enthusiastic experts}
+\ndsubsection{Who is Debian}
 % could be simply 'Debian People' or 'Debian Community'
 
 Debian is the only major operating system developed
@@ -388,9 +388,9 @@ system allows Debian to respond to problems quickly and honestly.
 \ndsection{NeuroDebian is}
 
 a Debian project that provides the Neuroscience community with a
-stable and versatile research platform -- the Debian OS.
-Since 2005, NeuroDebian integrates neuroscience software into the Debian
-operating system to allow neuroscientists to benefit from the advantages of
+stable and versatile research platform -- the Debian operating system.
+Since 2005, \mbox{NeuroDebian} integrates neuroscience software into Debian
+to allow neuroscientists to benefit from the advantages of
 the universal operating system in their day-to-day research activities.
 The NeuroDebian repository
 (\url{http://neuro.debian.net}) offers the latest research software for
@@ -414,7 +414,7 @@ efforts of thousands of Debian contributors.
 \vspace{3em}
 \columnbreak
 
-\ndsubsection{NeuroDebian software coverage}
+\ndsubsection{Software at your fingertips}
 \begin{flushright}
 \vspace{-0.5em}
 \url{http://neuro.debian.net/pkgs.html}
@@ -430,14 +430,14 @@ efforts of thousands of Debian contributors.
 \begin{itemize}[nolistsep,leftmargin=1pc]
 
 % rephrase to outline the benefit, not burden
-\item Debian standards and policies guarantee quality and robustness
+\item Debian standards and policies guarantee quality and robustness.
 
 \item Debian's centralized bug tracking system provides a unified
   single-point of entry for bug reporting and troubleshooting for any
-  software in Debian
+  software in Debian.
 
 \item Debian makes software available through a world-wide distribution
-  network, thus offloading bandwidth demands
+  network, thus offloading bandwidth demands.
 
 \item Other Debian contributors handle large-scale aspects of
   deployment, quality assurance, porting and integration at the level
@@ -507,7 +507,7 @@ buga dugabuga dugabuga dugabuga dugabuga dugabuga dugabuga dugabuga dugabuga dug
 \item[Available snapshotting service]
   % Entire NeuroDebian repository for any given past moment
   All versions of packages readily available
-\item[Data as the 1st class citizen]
+\item[Data as the 1st-class citizen]
   \url{http://neuro.debian.net/datasets.html}
 \item[Universal availability]
   % \begin{itemize}[nolistsep,leftmargin=1pc,topsep=0em]
@@ -539,8 +539,8 @@ Pennsylvania, Philadelphia, USA}
 
 \ndsubsection{Acknowledgements}
 
-NeuroDebian is grateful to all Debian developers and contributors for the
-development of Debian OS, and to Prof. James V. Haxby (PBS Department,
+NeuroDebian is grateful to all Debian developers and contributors for
+developing the Debian operating system, and to Prof. James V. Haxby (PBS Department,
 Dartmouth College) for his continued support and endless supply of
 Italian espresso (\url{http://neuro.debian.net/coffeeart.html}).